Please proof-read for mistake...thanks for your time and God's Bless.?

second paragraph, second sentence fix "the most by won any Olympian" to the most won by any Olympian. in the 2nd paragraph last sentence add not a positive role model for young people to follow. the 2nd to last paragraph at the end needs to be re worded a little some of it doesn't make sense. the conclusion the 3rd sentence make athlete plural to athlete's; other than those minor error i think it sounds good